I am a student at in Uru MÄnuka. In 2020 I was a year 9 and in 2021 I will be a year 10. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
Thursday, 15 June 2017
Something i've enjoyed about doing this was making it and finding out that he started to write books like this when he was 13
Something I need to work on is making it more creative and fun to watch
Hi Tyrell, I love that you have written a biography about Mr Pilkey. It was interesting to know about him. Maybe next time you could add pictures of him and try to put some punctuation in your work just to be helpful. But I like your work it's great :)
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Hi Tyrell,
ReplyDeleteI love that you have written a biography about Mr Pilkey. It was interesting to know about him. Maybe next time you could add pictures of him and try to put some punctuation in your work just to be helpful. But I like your work it's great :)
Hi Eden!
ReplyDeleteThanks for the comment, i also appreciate the feed back!