Freda and I

Freda and I

As I crawled through the freezing cold trenches,

A chill was sent up my spine.

All I could hear were the sounds of BOMBS, BOOM BAM CRASH,

As one of the bombing planes came crashing down.

Suddenly, everything goes quiet,

Freeda and I lay low in the cold muddy trenches,

After a while,

I poke my head out to see what was happening,

Then out of nowhere I hear a loud BANG,

Then every one got to go home.

In class we read a book called 'The Anzac puppy' by Peter Millett and Trish Bowles then afterwards we had to write a flashback in the perspective of either Sam the soldier, Freda the dog or Lucy the lady that owns the dog, but I chose sam.

Something I thought I did good was adding in the sounds of the bombs and guns like how they are really bold and they stand out, something I need to work on next time is adding more information and being alot more creative